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by **al_tyranny** on Wed Oct 19, 2005 8:29 pm

Well, I have a school project about how poems affect and influence people. While most people I know are using people exclusively from Boston, I thought it would be cool to do a much more world-spanning collection (here's where the Phoenix Community has a chance to represent itself in the global view =P).

The idea is quite simple. All you do is post a poem that has a great personel meaning to you and a brief paragraph about why it's important to you. Sample formats/poems can be found on the website, Favorite Poem. (website seems to be unresponsive for some reason ... maybe it will fix itself later).

- If it is a very long poem, you can link to it instead of copy/pasting it.
- If the poem was originally written in another language and you can find an original version of it, please link to that too!
- Restrictions: The poem must have been "published" by some sort of printing firm. Basically this means that you can't use a poem that you wrote to a friend when they were sad to cheer them up
- If your poem is a traditional folk poem or something similiar and hasn't been "published" yet, that probably counts as "published" so write it down anyway! In any case, this has potential to turn from a school project into something quite revealing about the community!

If you want to include your real name (first, last) with your submission, that's excellent. If you don't, it's no big deal.

Thank you for your assistance.

by **mm_freak** on Wed Oct 19, 2005 8:44 pm

I write my own, but they're German and thus worthless, I guess. You can't translate poems either.

by **pugrit** on Wed Oct 19, 2005 10:09 pm

i have my own composition but:

- Restrictions: The poem must have been "published" by some sort of printing firm. Basically this means that you can't use a poem that you wrote to a friend when they were sad to cheer them up

my composition was for my finals project in literature, i choose Robert Frost and his work 'The road not taken' as topic then added personal insights plus i made some poems similar to his style, simple,narrative with deeper meaning.

poems affect people because.

when you read something and you find out someone out there has similar expereince as you, written in a peom,its a delight to know that you are not alone, someone/thing that can relate to you emotional dimensions. or poems make you express what you really feel without limits and boundaries of reality,or even simple moments and yet you see the deeper meaning of it

i hope this helps.

by **krod** on Thu Oct 20, 2005 12:42 am

Sonnet 29
by William Shakespeare

When, in disgrace with Fortune and men's eyes,
I all alone beweep my outcast state,
And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless cries,
And look upon myself and curse my fate,
Wishing me like to one more rich in hope,
Featured like him, like him with friends possessed,
Desiring this man's art and that man's scope,
With what I most enjoy contented least;
Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising,
Haply I think on thee, and then my state
(Like to the lark at break of day arising
From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven's gate;
For thy sweet love remembered such wealth brings
That then I scorn to change my state with kings.

and

Part of Henry V
by William Shakespeare
Look on google to see the full version

From this day to the ending of the World,
...we in it shall be remembered
...we band of brothers

First name: jared
last: nuttall
good luck with the school project Wink

by **mm_freak** on Thu Oct 20, 2005 5:08 am

Another thing with poems that touches especially me is the way it is written. I don't mean rhymes, but rather the structuring and the way of expression; also how the author makes use of punctuation. Those things often have a deeper sense, but most people ignore that.

by **pimpdawny** on Thu Oct 20, 2005 4:50 pm

I have a poem that is very dear to my heart. I wrote it (and I am getting it published soon). It was during a very dark time in my life. And I feel that it is a great poem - as do many others. People have been begging me to get a poetry book written.

Careless

a deer caught in headlights
appeared out of nowhere
she is alone and afraid
knowing her life will end
in the blink of an eye
for someone careless doesn't see her
someone careless doesn't know her
someone careless doesn't care
she knows now her death is inevitable
she tries to run but cannot
for her legs will not carry her
she tries to scream
but all that comes out is a whisper of 'please'
for an instant before the car speeds into her
she realizes that she's not a deer
she opens her eyes
and sees
that it's me

by **pugrit** on Thu Oct 20, 2005 10:29 pm

heres one, inpired by my girlfriend for letting me wait, ALWAYS.(girls,sigh)

standing and waiting
my knees are aching,
to see you coming
my heart is pounding,

its not published though. hehehehehehe. i wanted it to more like robert frost's style and also like a haiku but i dont know, the verse just came up in my mind..hehehehehhe

by **mm_freak** on Thu Oct 20, 2005 11:10 pm

Anyone understanding German here? Then I could post my own here also.

by **pimpdawny** on Sat Oct 22, 2005 3:13 am

I personally don't know German language, but there has to be a translater around somewhere to help me understand it. You should post it. Smile

by **mm_freak** on Sat Oct 22, 2005 6:04 am

Well, then here it is, one of my poems. It's about war. I've tried to translate it below, but an original is always better, and as you know poems can't be translated:

Code: Select all: Wandinsel (2004-08-30) Siehst Du die Wand, Siehst Du die Insel, So gib mir Deine Hand! Tauch ihn in die rote Farbe, Der einzige Freund ist Dein Pinsel! Ich bin, was Du machst, Ich bin, was Du verdienst, So zeige, dass Du lachst, Doch auch, wie Du innerlich weinst! Auch, wenn Du nicht traurig schienst. Was Du malst, ist Dein Werk, Was Du zahlst, ist der Bilderberg. Was auch immer Du machst, Worüber auch immer Du lachst, Das ist die Wand, die Du baust! Es ist mein Wille, Quäle Deine Bilder! Bis sie trocken sind, in Stille, Nutze Deine Schilder! Denn ich bin, was Du willst, Denn ich bin, was Du fürchtest, Denn Du bist, was Du stillst, Und Du bist, was Du vernichtest, Gebe neue Farbe, Deinem Pinsel! Ziehe in den Bilderkrieg! Lade nach, Deinen Pinsel, Stehe aufrecht, bis zum Sieg! Oder bis zum Verlassen der Insel... Glaube mir, ich mag Dich!

English translation (as good as possible):

Code: Select all: Isle of walls (Wandinsel) Do You see the wall, Do You see the isle, So take my hand! Dip it into the red color, Your brush is Your only friend. I am what You create, I am what You deserve, So show me how You're laughing, But also inwardly crying! Even if You didn't look sad. What You paint is Your work, What You pay is the picture pile. Whatever You make, Whatever You laugh about, This is the wall You build. It's my desire, Torment Your paintings! Till they dry off in silence, Use Your shields! Cause I am what You desire, Cause I am what You fear, Cause You are what You paint, And You are what You destroy. Refresh Your brush color! Go to the painting war! Reload Your brush, Stand upright till victory! Or till leaving the isle... Trust me, I like You!

by **al_tyranny** on Sat Oct 22, 2005 6:24 pm

Thatnks for your help guys, but I may not have made myself entirely clear ...

The poem must have been "published" in some way ... being "published" on the internet or a school magazine doesn not count (I did ask about this ... my teacher wants a "professional poet" to have written the poems Confused

:stupid: ).

pugrit and krod have the right idea here: take a poem that means a lot to you and explain what its importance is (although krod skipped the "importance" part =P ).

pugrit wrote:i choose Robert Frost and his work 'The road not taken' as topic then added personal insights plus i made some poems similar to his style, simple,narrative with deeper meaning.

poems affect people because.

when you read something and you find out someone out there has similar expereince as you, written in a peom,its a delight to know that you are not alone, someone/thing that can relate to you emotional dimensions. or poems make you express what you really feel without limits and boundaries of reality,or even simple moments and yet you see the deeper meaning of it

And krod's:

krod wrote:Sonnet 29
by William Shakespeare

When, in disgrace with Fortune and men's eyes,
I all alone beweep my outcast state,
And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless cries,
And look upon myself and curse my fate,
Wishing me like to one more rich in hope,
Featured like him, like him with friends possessed,
Desiring this man's art and that man's scope,
With what I most enjoy contented least;
Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising,
Haply I think on thee, and then my state
(Like to the lark at break of day arising
From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven's gate;
For thy sweet love remembered such wealth brings
That then I scorn to change my state with kings.

krod, please state why this is important to you.

P.S. Oddly enough, I had to recite this very same sonnet from memory last year in English ... strange how literature can connect us, isn't it?

by **mm_freak** on Sun Oct 23, 2005 5:39 am

I just wanted to answer pimpdawny's request. Nothing for bad. =)

.oO( The disappearance of the quote button had bad influence to me. Usually I'd have quoted a few lines of his post... )

by **fishpoo222** on Mon Oct 24, 2005 1:38 pm

heh! I dont know about poems but the thing that touches me most is my girlfreind! Wink

by **Díoltas** on Mon Nov 28, 2005 2:55 am

Worker bees can leave
even drones can fly away
the queen is their slave

This is a haiku from the fight club book by chuck palahniuk. I like it because their is alot of meaning in it. If you read the book you'd understand. I would recommend reading it as I think it is a brilliant book.

by **Will** on Tue Nov 29, 2005 12:42 am

Anything by Shakespeare is great. (Hamlet and Midsummer's Night Dream are the best IMO).

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